twilight fanfiction

Title : twilight fanfiction
Author : Marcedes Amber
Source : www. Fanfiction.com

Twilight fanfiction which is written by Marcedes Amber takes the first chapter of twilight, written by Stephenie Meyer, if we have read the original one, we will find some differences, but there still a lot of things that is same with the original version.

Twilight fanfiction tells that Bella thought her first day at Forks High School was the worst thing in her life. After get off from her truck, she put her bag on her back and went to the administration offic to get the school map. Suddenly, she bumped into Mike Newton. Fortunately, he was a kind person who helped her to find where her English class was. In the break time. Mike asked her to go to the cafetaria and introduce her to some other friends, Jessica, Angela, Eric, Tyler, and Lavient. Later, we will know that Laurent was a rude vampire.

Far away from Bella’s table there were seven people sitting and chatting each other. They were beautiful and had pale skin. They were Emmett, Edward, Jesper, Louise, Kate, and Alice. They were adopted by Cullen family. At that time, Bella was curious to them so much because they were different from others.

After the bell rang, Mike, Angela, and bella went to the Biology class. in the class, unfortunately, there was only one seat left for Bella so that she had to sit there whether she liked or not. She went to her seat and it was so surprising because the person who sat beside her was Alice cullen, who was short, black hair, pale skin and had beautiful glittering eyes.

Of course, from the explanation above we can conclude that there are some things that is changed into the new version, for instance, Laurent who is in the school, and additional characters, Kate and Louise, the special relationshiph between Edward and Kate, and also Alice who is in the same biology class with Bella. On the other hand, in the movie and book version, Laurent is not go to the school, the are not neither Kate nor Louise, and Bella should sit next to Edward instead of Alice. The most important is Edward is the cold person who never make relationship with other girls.

Ika

The Seventh Year – 4 Ronald’s Romantic

Title : The Seventh Year – 4 Ronald’s Romantic
Author : Charlotte Lily Mason

This fan fiction is very interesting. This short story tells us about the most surprisingthing which Ron revealed while he and Harry eaves dropping on Hermione, Ginny, and Rachel’s conversation about each of their feeling. Soon, Ron discovered that Hermione actually liked him. But, because of the sudden shock Ron made unwanted noice and then he and Harry tried to find a place to hide themseleves. Fortunately, the girls could not find their hide.

Yudha

The Beginning of the Rest of Harry Potter’s Life

Title : The Beginning of the Rest of Harry Potter’s Life
Author : Dakwriterff

After divorcing from Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter often appeared in a magazine or newspaper. He felt stress actually, so Hermione suggested to him to take a holiday. But, Harry refused it, even it made Hermione thought that Harry was a gay for not looking for another woman after Ginny. To refuse Harmione’s opinion Harry went to “The Spanking Monkey Club” and there he met a woman. After that he had many times dating with many different women and he appeared again in a newspaper that he was a play boy of the wizarding world. Finally, Harry accepted Harmione’s suggestion to take an holiday and Harmione had prepared someone to accompany him. Because of Draco Malfoy and Harmione’s help Harry met Luna lovegood in a dinner time. Suddenly, Harry felt in love with her, but this feeling did not same to the previous toward the woman in previous datings. Harry really loved Luna and she did as well. Then, they became a happy couple.

Indah

the 7th Year 4 Ronald’s Romantic

Title : the 7th Year 4 Ronald’s Romantic
Author : Charlotte Lily Mason

This fanfic is so funny. It tells about Ron and Harry sneaking around trying to spy on the girls. They eavesdropped Hermione, Ginny, and Rachel sharing about their feelings. They they heard Ginny asking Hermione about her feeling to Ron. Hermione said honestly that she always liked Ron and she wanted to kiss him sometimes. Ron heard ot, thus he made a sudden noice. Soon, he tried to find a place to hide. Luvkily, the girls cannot find them.

Putri

Saving The One She Knew

Title : Saving The One She Knew
Author : Lindsey
Source : www.veritaserum.com

This fanfic tells about Harry’s condition after two months his godfather dies. He spent very horrible summer with Weasley’s. He, almost everyday had quarrel and even ended by someone got hurt. He hit Ron and slapped Hermione. Last time, Harry yelled at the whole Weasleys. Then, he locked himself in his room and let no one enter the room. All people lem him be alone and made sure that he was fine. However, there was one who had another idea.

Ginnie, decided to visit Harry. She crept through window. Harry was so shocked that he just let her be in. For a while, they argued each other. Harry shouted that he did not have family. An unexpected reaction came from Ginnie. She said that Harry did have family because family did not always relate to blood but family was about whom he cared and who care about him. Finally, Harry realized that he was wrong and he had family around him. Those arguments from Ginnie were that he wanted to hear. Then, thay just kept silent and Ginnie felt asleep. Harry laid her on his bed and when he laid on the floof, he stared at the stars and sky, and said, “Thank You”.

Ratih

Richard Turner’s Adventure

Title : Richard Turner’s Adventure
Author : Anonymous

Richard Turner, son of William Turner, had become a great pirate in the sea of Carribean. One day, when he tried to find the biggest treasure of Davy Jones, he met another pirates which is lead by a famous buccaneer, Will Turner. Because of the unintentional encounter with his father, Richard had to choose between got the treassure or got back his father. Finally, he shoose to work along with his father and be the most frightening pirate squad ever.

Comment:
this is a bad story. The writer used bad English and sometimes it is written in pirates’ language.

Alvin

Kingdom of Heaven Fanfic

Title : Kingdom of Heaven Fanfic

Balian peered over the menacing wall of Jerusalem, starting into the blackness and waiting for the first star of light to appear on the horizon. The archery markers stood white against the red soil, anticipating their soon use. His mind wondered vaguely to Sybilla, that one night of bliss they had shared, but then he turned towards the direction of Calvary, where he had buried his wife just a few short months before. He saw her again in his mind, her laughing blue eyes and dark auburn hair, her red lips curving into a smile as she took his hand. Exactly how he remembered her and always would. Then their son, a strong little lad that looked so much like his mother but bore his father’s name. Balian smiled at the recollection, but it soon faded, for what had transpired next had devastated his world. Little Balian had taken ill and the fever soon claimed the small life that had brought so much joy. His wife had been distraught beyond consolation and he shuddered as he remembered her lifeless body swinging limply from a rafter of their home. He opened his hand to see the cross shaped scar burned into his flesh. She was not in hell, she would always be in his heart, no matter what any priest said. France seemed so far away now, everything did. He seemed a detached soul floating aimlessly in a dark abyss with nothing to grasp. Ever since his wife’s death he had felt so, Sybilla had seemed to provide anchorage for a little while but she did not understand him as she once had. She may have wished him and he her, but he would not cause another man’s death with false evidence for a kingdom that would soon fall. He frowned in disgust at the memory of the Templar Knights. The cry of ”God wills it!” echoed in his ears. How could God will any such thing that would call for meaningless slaughter of innocents only for personal gain? Which side was good really on, or did he let men settle their own petty affairs and simply stay out of it? But if this was God’s holy city, the true kingdom of heaven, would he not care what became of it? No, God, it seemed had disereted them. But maybe he would show mercy, Balian closed his eyes in prayer, something he had not done for nearly a year.

“God, spare the people save the innocents.” He whispered quietly. As e raised his eyes, he saw the first lone light of Saladin’s army appear over the hill. Soon a flood f lights fallowed. He pictured his son and wife one last time and then called the men to arms.

Henifa

Free to Love “Romeo and Juliet Fanfiction”

Title : Free to Love “Romeo and Juliet Fanfiction”
Author : Anonymous
Pages : 2

In the real story of “Romeo and Juliet”, they both died because of drank a bottle of poison. But in this fanfiction, when Romeo wanted to drink the poison and ready to join Juliet in the throes of death. Suddenly, Julieth woke up and her hand brushed Romeo’s cheek, lightly. Romeo felt so shock and disbelief and the toxic had poured onto his pants. Finally they runned away together to face their future of love.

Comment:
Its good for their love, but not for their family. The Montegos and The Capulets could get along because of their children, Romeo and Juliet, died.

Ican

Fanfiction

Title : -
Author : Emelee

I do not read all Harry Potter series, so when I read this part it was a bit confusing. Maybe I can tell you the story based on my background knowledge about Harry Potter. The main character was Rose Weasley, she was Ron’s daughter, and it seems that she was falling in love with Malfoy’s son. scorpius Malfoy also was falling wih Rose Weasley. Yet, in the story they seemed to not have a bad relationship. It appears that they once had a good relationship but they had broken up. Rose Weasley had a bad carrier in her life. One day she was fired and she got drunk in a bar. She met Scorpius Malfoy in that bar and she was collapsed because of it. And the story ended when Scorpius Malfoy went from the bar after he had argued with Rose Weasley. It is still the first chapter and I have not found the second chapter.

Awfini

fanfiction twilight movie

Title : fanfiction twilight movie
Author : My Lion-My Lamb

Actually there is something to Edward that makes him real Edward. He will do everything for Bella that makes him a romantic man. Edward seemed a bit too aggressive and open in some cases. One this that annoyed the writer was the fact that they (Edward and Bella) showed up at school as a “couple”. He threw his arm over Bella’s shoulder. The writer thought that it was different Edward . actually it was enough for Edward just to hold Bella’s hand. Edward should be coller because he is a vampire. Eventhough he is fall in love to Bella, he should be not too aggressive. If Edward do that, he will be cooler and more charismatic vampire.

Tri

Fanfiction of Twilight

Edward and Bella finally married and they have a daughter. She has a relationship with Jacob. One morning, she wanted to meet Jason and her father, Edward can read her mind and he actuall didn’t like if his daughter has relaationship with anyone. Then he started to make a conversation with her, and she began to ask about her grandmother. Edward promised that he will met her with her grandma.

Comment:
I think the writer is so creative and imaginative. They can create stories more creative than the author.

Amon

Fanfiction of Harry Potter

Source : www.veritaserumcom

The story that I read is about Harry Potter, I do not know what chapter was, because in the story Ron was mentioned already dead. Then Hermione had delusional about Ron that actually Ron was still alive. The story does not have opening, climax, and ending. T was very flat story, I think.

Comment:
I do not really like the story. I think almost the story in fanfiction are too imaginative. Yet, some of the readers give high rating to the story. Perhaps I have to be more imaginative then. I learn some vocabulary from the story, but I can catch the story well because the diction in the story is flat.

Adna

Fanfiction of Fantastic Five

One of the fans of Fantastic Four (F4) wrote about Fantastic Five. He/she wrote that the fifth member of F4 was Helena. Helenaa was Susan’s neighbour. So, in the end there would be five people who would defeat Victor Von Noom, they were “Mr. Fantastic “ (Richard), “invicible woman” (Sue), “The Things” (Ben), “Johny Storm” (Johny), and “The Green” (Helena).

Comment:
in my opinion, it was true that Helena was really one of the characters in F4 in anime version, but she didn’t join F4. Based on anime version, in future there would be a person who could defeat Victor. He was Franklin, Richard, ans Sue’s child. He was the strongest one in the story. He had ability to create another mutant or superhero based on his imagination.

Galuh

fanfiction of August Rush

Title : fanfiction of August Rush

The concert was long over, but the music of August was starting to reach the climax. August has an excellent ability in this point. When he finished his piece, he turned around his head and looked down to the point row. He saw him; Louis, the man he met in the park earlier that day and a beautiful woman standing next to him.

After the concert, Mr. Jefferies looked for August to tell an urgent thing to him. When August took a chat with Louis and Lyla, was his mother. And while she felt very happy to see her son, she said to August that Louis was his father. Then, the trio were in romantic condition for no see in a long time. Then, Mr. Jefferies told them to make the family in a legal sense. Suddenly, Marshall, Louis’ brother came to call Louis to go, but in fact he received a surprise about this.

In Jefferies’office, Louis and Lyla were in the same room, talking about how they met first, how they separated, Louis’ assumption that Lyla was married another man, and also having August. Lyla clarified all their misunderstanding, and also said that she was still single. Then, they decided to get married and made having August legal although they relized that it was going to take long process.

Finally, Lyla Nouacek becomes Lyla lonely. She and her family had a grand apartment with studio in Manhattan. She was still playing with New York Philharmonie on the persuasion from both her son and her husband. The orchestra welcomed her with open arms. Louis was still playing with the band and usually booked a room when he had a show outside the city. And August was in Julliard ad composed another rhapsody in his composition class.

Lyla and Louis had gotten into a fight about his last name. it was August in the end that had ended the little quarrel by saying that he would take both names in honor of them because they have given him the gift to her music. His name was August Novacek Comelly.

Comment:
I think it is a very good ending for August Rush. As I watched the ending in the movie, I thought it was not quite satisfying. It was still unclear whether August recognized his parents or not or whether they all became one or not in the end. By reading this fanfiction, it is like a way to satisfy people who watch the movie about the ending. It is a good choice to be the ending of August Rush movie.

Diah

fanfiction “Batman” (The Boy, The Girl, and The Bats)

Title : fanfiction “Batman” (The Boy, The Girl, and The Bats)

One day in a winter, a girl who had left by her parents met a boy who was little bit order that her who also had left by his parents. Their parents were passed away since they were child. Since that day, thay became a good friend and finally they got married. The name of the girl is Julis Waters and the name of the boy is Bruce who was a “Batman”

Wisnu

fan fiction of Card Capture Sakura

Title : fan fiction of Card Capture Sakura

This anime is all about a young girl, Sakura Kinomoto, who discovers a magical cards in her father’s library. When she easily opens the seal, which secured the book, she finds that the book is filled with magical cards all having special power. As she picks up the windy card, a strong wind occurs sending all of the cards flying in different directions. Then, the guardian of the cards, Kero, appears. He explains to Sakura that she has to capture all of those cards or strange things will begin to happen in her world. Thus, the adventure begins. In her adventures, she is helped by Tomoya Daidoji (her closed friend), Kero (the guardian of the cards), Li Syaoran, and the other characters. She also has some rivals such as Eriol, Spinel Sun, and Ruby Moon who avoid her to retrieve the missing cards. There are many battles that is full of magical power. It is so wonderful.

Comment:
I like to read this fan fiction because I like the anime television series much. The theme is about love and friendship which are familiar with teenager.

Dian

Birth of a Name

Title : Birth of a Name
Author : Nonjon
source : funfiction.net

it is the story about how Lord Voldomont found his name. It began when his defence proffesor taught him a spell that could help rearranging his name. Seeing that Tom Riddle really dislike his name and wanted to have another, mush coller, name, he tried it. He wrote his full name, ‘Tom Marvollo Ridde’ and spelled ‘Jumblio’ while pointing his wand at the parchment. However, the names that he got were not as cool as his imagination, like ‘Lord Leotard Mom IV’, ‘Tim Doom Lardlover’, ‘Retard Doll Moovim’, ‘Valid Motor Molder’, ‘Tim Mas Drool Lover, and many riddiculous names. In the end, he got a name which was quite closer to his future name: I’m Lord Voldemorta.

Suci

“Bella, what does that taste like?”

Title : “Bella, what does that taste like?”
Author : twilightgirl 65
Pages : 3 pages

This story told about Emmett who wanted to try ate human food. One morning, Emmett came to Bella’s house when Bella was eating her breakfast, that was cereal. Emmett felt curious with Bella’s food and he wanted to eat it too. Bella said to Emmett that he was a vampire and his food is blood. Emmett did not care about that, he still wanted to eat the cereal. He said that he wanted to do/make a scientific discovery. He wanted to be the first vampire that could eat human food. Bella gave some cereals to Emmett and he finaly ate the cereal. Then, Bella and Emmett went to Carlisle’s house. Bella told Esme and all of Edward’s family about what Emmett had done in Bella’s house. Emmett’s family said that he shall not do that thing, ate human food and Carlisle said to Emmett that Emmett’s dream was to talk with dolphin not to eat human food. At the end, Emmett remebered his dream and he said that he would try to talk with dolphin.

This fanfiction is interesting, it is told about Emmett who is a funny vampire. In my opinion, this story is so funny and I never imagine about this story before.

Iid

1984 – An End to it all

Title : 1984 – An End to it all
Author : Daniels Girls

Harry and Ginny were falling in love. They become a popular couple in Hogwarts called as “The Twin”. It caused by they rarelt seen without each other. However, their relationship get a little problem. Harry’s parents quite doubtful about them. When Harry’s parents asked them about their relationship, Ginny got angry and blamming them. Harry and Ginny try to convince them. Even, Ron and Hermione said that even this is Harry’s first one love, please try to make it as his only one love. They said it when they were in Dragon Alley before the school year started. After that, Harry and Ginny getting very close. They always walked and seen together. When they were in the Hogwart Express, Cho Chang was shocked because she found thatHarry and Ginny were kissing each other.

Comment of the story:
I don’t think that this story id good. Because in this story there was too much kissing and romance. I don’t really like it because the story line is flat and quite predictable.

Khoirul